Jildar Eyre

Eyes - Brown
Hair - Medium Long
Skin Color - Light Crème

Weapon of Preference - Swords
Disliked weapon - Axes
Likes - Studying
Dislikes - Swimming

Age - 21

Life Story - Jildar, Being Part of the Eyre Family, Has 2 Siblings. These are Jade Eyre and Rhys Eyre, Rhys was recently found dead by cause of suicide. After this event, he became part of the religion of "Union" and earned enlightment and holy relics. Jildar spends most of his time studying medical books, Inspired by Yanars, He becomes a Doctor at the age of 18. As a Child, He lived with the Eyre's at the Xion Clan in Ellador. After Regalia's blossominf in publicity, The Eyre Family moved there. Being part of the "Adventurers' Club" ran by Dr. Fong, He earns money doing quests, Such as: Gathering Vampire Fangs, Desinfestating the Fong Families Basements of Rat Kings, Etc. While being with the Xion, He learned Swordsmanship and Archery, Although, He never got around to learn Axe-Weilding. After being persued by anonymous Maiars, He escapes into Regalia's outskirts.
He tries to avoid Regalia as much as possible, but scince its named as the Capital, He has no choice. His Doctoral-Profesion was also inspired by his afined closeness with the Chrysant Wars. As he knew of the people who could have been saved with a good doctor. In Actuality, He's staying in the "Helvetican" Empire, Where he lives, Hiding from The Predator maiars he is persued by.

A great start on your character sheet Aris ^^ here is some feedback and suggestions:

- Explain a little why your character likes swords and why he dislikes axes. There are great opportunities to tell a story there! The same goes for Likes and Dislikes, make a story there, tell the reader why these things are important to Jildar. You do a little bit of that in the Life Story, but you never explain why, or what drove your character to do so ;)something to think about.

- And below you can find a corrected version of your Life Story section:

Life Story - Jildar is an honorary member of the Eyre Family, which only had 2 children. These were Jade Eyre and Rhys Eyre. Rhys however was recently found dead. His tragic demise was attributed to suicide. This emotionally devastating event led Jildar to seek comfort and shelter within the religion of "Union". Here he earned enlightenment and was rewarded for his faith with holy relics of the order.

Jildar invested himself in the study of medicinal history and books about the practical application thereof.
Inspired by the Yanar and their magnificent abilities he embarks on the path of doctor at the age of 18. Most of his childhood was spent with the Eyre family at the Xion Clan in Ellador. While being with Xion, Jildar learned to wield the sword and hunt with the bow. His training however never extended to wielding an axe. After Regalia's inevitable blossoming though the Eyre family naturally migrated to the capital. Joining them in their move, but seeking his own path, Jildar joined the "Adventurers' Club" ran by the venerable Dr. Fong. There he earns his keep in coin by doing quests such as: Gathering Vampire Fangs, clearing the Fong Family's basements of Rat Kings, etc.

After being pursued by anonymous Maiars though, he escapes into Regalia's outskirts. Now being hunted, he tries to avoid Regalia as much as possible, but finds himself constantly drawn back to the capital city and it's promise of bounty and adventure.

His profession as a doctor was also inspired by his closeness and involvement in the Chrysant Wars. He was haunted by the knowledge that so many lives could have been saved had there but been a capable doctor to help them.

Now a days Jildar lives in the City State of Helvetica, enjoying the cities freedom and protection from the predatorial maiar who once threatened his life.